This is my first draft.

I am learning to develop independence in planning for writing

Guiding questions: What is my purpose in writing?  Who am I writing for, who is my audience?

Intro who, where, when, what	Main Event 1 & Mood	Main Event 2 & Mood	Reflection  thoughts about that day)
Me,sonny,Dargaville Race Track,15.9.16,Competing against the best runners in Northland.	Getting ready to run Excited	Running (Up the hill) It was tiring.	I want to do it again. That was the first time I ran the race track in Dargaville

Linking/sequencing words I can use	Similes I could use	Metaphors I could use	See, hear, feel, think
After that we were at the last hurdle a boy was climbing over it and jumped it and he tried to punch me.	The mud was as slippery as ice, was  hulk smashing down` the hill.	I was hulk smashing down the hill.	I seen a lot of people full over,I heard a lot of huffing and puffing,I felt a stitch,I thought I was coming lust.

                                                                                                  Cross country.

Get up boys Noeline said it's time for cross country. Ok me and Sonny said. I just couldn’t wait I thought.

How many minutes later we arrived a Dargaville Race Track me and Sonny said not much people here ay. When we got out of the driveway we seen how many people were there I take that back Sonny there is a lot of people. Matt screamed come on boys your race is next so we ran to go put our t-shirt’s on and walked to the start line. 2 minutes this man said 10 minutes to go 10 year old boys. As sone as he said that I got nervous as. 10 minutes later he smacked the to wood together we boasted of.  

Around half way there was this corner that was as slippery as ice I seen lots of kids slipping over and the one boy kicked me down the hill and I got back up and kicked him back and kept running. It came to this big hill that we had to run down it felt like I was hulk smashing down the hill. On the last hurdle a boy was climbing over it and jumped it and he tried to punch me. But i still blits him of.

I will never forget that day it felt like i was running in the 2016 Olympics.