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Tuesday, 15 March 2016

Skatepark disaster Draft Two. What I need to work on is adding detail and improve my spelling


Skatepark disaster

Guess what happened  to me. Read the story if you want to no. In the summer holiday. Something awful happen to me.

Yah you no it is the same day. The day of the Skatepark Disaster. I was cracking some  narle trikes. Until the feeling do you know what that feeling  was the peeing feeling. That is not a good feeling. Ez my sister and I Zoomed to the toilet.{It was coming it was coming I thought}. We finally got there. I felt something wet in my underpants. The toilet was 5 seconds away. When I was there it felt like I run 100K.  

Few that was a scary story do you get it.

3 comments:

  1. Wow Tim I really liked your story and the part I liked was that you were in a rush to go to the toilet and because I liked that part of your story was that it interested me and that it hooked me in as your reader.

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  3. Hi Tim, great job on this interesting funny recount. The part I think is the best is peeing your pants. Blog you later.

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